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You flew too close to the sun my friend.
I'll tell you a secret.  We worshipped
the sultry burn of  liquid wax.

Praised how it dripped with the callous
uncertainty of a blood transfusion.

A candle light vigil plus an orgy.
It's always summer in the hell you made for me.
The sheer cold of sixty five degrees drove me mad.

All I can see are clay skinned women nursing
their babes with odious and bitter sweat.

Not even the devil would come
for a visit to this blistered land.
Fail me the way man failed to define evil.

It was my fault for putting the match in your hand,
God's fault for giving the Angels wings, and

your fault for being born on the wrong world.
Another one I've written for class. Let me know what you think.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"Fail me the way man failed to define evil."

Such a great line and so very true. I love this poem and I wish I could fav it twice. :star: :star:
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Agnes-Arelia Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, the imagery here is amazing. Reading this literally made me uncomfortable in my own skin, which in this case is definitely a compliment! :)
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it!
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Agnes-Arelia Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :)
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful! there's some great imagery the words paint, like a tale being told
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you. glad you liked it!
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012
Nicely done, sir. Definitely some touches of originality in the visualised concepts, and the expression of them.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you :)
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
:thumbsup:
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ElfFriend1 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Professional Artist
Wow... THis is... wow. THis is fantastic!

I really really like your style!
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Student Writer
that's very kind of you to say. Thanks!
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ElfFriend1 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Professional Artist
Welcome!
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darkallegiance666 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
You're just getting better & better, imo. Your poetry really makes me think, as well as providing visual imagery.
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Golden-Koi Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Love it! I really liked how in the first few stanzas the reader feels like they're understanding where the poem is going but then towards the end you veer off into a very surreal, philosophical-esque direction. Hope you get an A+!
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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teardownthefence Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012
I really like this one :)
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you :)
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012
Wow. Beautiful and haunting. Wonderful job, lovely imagery and flow.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks a lot!
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
You're welcome. :)
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Kicking-AWOL Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist
oh wow. this really has a a force behind it, and i especially like the last three lines.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks!
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