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You flew too close to the sun my friend.
I'll tell you a secret.  We worshipped
the sultry burn of  liquid wax.

Praised how it dripped with the callous
uncertainty of a blood transfusion.

A candle light vigil plus an orgy.
It's always summer in the hell you made for me.
The sheer cold of sixty five degrees drove me mad.

All I can see are clay skinned women nursing
their babes with odious and bitter sweat.

Not even the devil would come
for a visit to this blistered land.
Fail me the way man failed to define evil.

It was my fault for putting the match in your hand,
God's fault for giving the Angels wings, and

your fault for being born on the wrong world.
Another one I've written for class. Let me know what you think.
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TheLunaLily Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"Fail me the way man failed to define evil."

Such a great line and so very true. I love this poem and I wish I could fav it twice. :star: :star:
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Agnes-Arelia Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, the imagery here is amazing. Reading this literally made me uncomfortable in my own skin, which in this case is definitely a compliment! :)
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it!
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Agnes-Arelia Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :)
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HippieHebe Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful! there's some great imagery the words paint, like a tale being told
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you. glad you liked it!
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012
Nicely done, sir. Definitely some touches of originality in the visualised concepts, and the expression of them.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you :)
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
:thumbsup:
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ElfFriend1 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Professional Artist
Wow... THis is... wow. THis is fantastic!

I really really like your style!
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