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I beat the street out of my lungs. Burned
Those pages of salvation until the ink boiled red.
When they finally caught me I cursed every soul still on
Their knees and damned the midnight lamps that
bled through two-faced windows. When they told me
“Son, you have nothing to howl about.”,  My voice
Became a whisper. In the prison they put us in
There are no bars, guards, or machine gun towers.
People come and go like moths to hellfire.
Like mass extinction and funeral pyres.

Not once did I think about escaping.  Until,
The girl in the cell next to mine started screaming. Until
She clawed so deep her arms started breathing. Until
She swallowed that bullet and called it leaving. Until
I finally learned what it really meant to stop bleeding.

I started seeing through the blank pages and white walls.
Underneath it all, different prophets sing the same song.
The greatest minds of my generation weren’t driven to madness.
They were born to it.  Their first breaths were equal parts smog and
Atomic arrogance. Encumbrance was their only inheritance.
The albatrosses of their mothers stapled to their necks
Like javelins through innocence. The parapets of their fathers
Sneered down at them like wolves challenging resistance.
And when they climbed the walls and finally reached the battlement,
Only two choices were left for them: Assimilation or pestilence.
This was inspired by the late great Allen Ginsberg and one of his most treasured poems "Howl".  If you have not read it (or any of his work for that matter)  I encourage you to stop what you are doing and look up some of his work.  This style is very different from what I usually write but I kind of enjoyed it.  I hope you do as well.  Feel free to leave any kind of comments or feedback.  
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The suggester has it right, Howl by RussianTim will leave you speechless and reeling. ( Suggested by WriterOfTheSky55 and Featured by GrimFace242 )
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DreamingSerafina Featured By Owner May 16, 2014  New member Student General Artist
Oh wow, thats one of the best poems Ive EVER read! Fantastic, amazing! (Im just not able to find the words it deserves... sniff.)
Really, that is pretty well written, I admire you so much for writing such a breath-taking, wonderful, sad-feeling-giving, hole-inside-me-leaving lyric!

Maybe you could allow me to translate it into german and post it somewhere here? www.fanfiktion.de/Allgemein/c/…
(There you can, next to other things, upload own and translatet lyrical art, such as poetry or prose)
Im not doing that the first time (okay - its the second time), but Im pretty good in language-relatet-things (people say - Im not quite sure but I thought it could be a reference) and Id promise you the message would be the same as before and all rights - of course, who would I be if not - stay by you. Id tell them its your poem and post the link to this side.
And could I (I know, dont ask people for more than one pleasures a time, but I just saw it and nearly cried because I thought I had to decide between them, but maybe you could be kind...) also translate "The snowball effect"? I would, I swear, post the links to the side where I would upload it, in the comments beneath the poems they relate.

It would be so cool if you would allow me doing that!
Pleaaaaseeee!!!!
*begging*

Greetings,
Serafina
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RussianTim Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you very much for your kind words my friend.  It makes me happy to know you enjoyed my poems so much.  I'd be honored if you translated them and posted them to your website.  I only ask that you reference me as the author and (as you said you would) post a link to my DA page.  Also, because I am trying to get published by magazines and what not, I would appreciate it if you could delete the poems if I ever need to submit them.  Many magazines are unwilling to publish poetry that has appeared anywhere else, even on personal blogs.  As long as these requests can be met I would be more than glad to let you translate and post those two poems.  Thank you for asking. Let me know when or if you upload them.

Best regards,

John 
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DreamingSerafina Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014  New member Student General Artist

I finally almost finished the Translation (I had a few exams, because of that I was a bit slow…).

Thank you so much, of course I would delete it if you needed to do anything with it. But I got a few problems with literal translation.
You write: I beat the street out of my lungs. Does it mean you cough?
The ink boiled red. Does it vaporize or cook?

Do you mean her arms started breathing? I don´t really understand the sense of breathing arms, though… I first read bleeding or beating, so I´m not that sure how it is meant. I mean, if it is an well-known metaphor, I maybe could translate it more by sense.

In german, burden would sound better than encumbrance, but mean the pretty same. Can I use it instead?

The parapets: Whom do they challenge? The ones looking up to them or the ones they were built against? (it is a difference in our language – it´s hard, I know).

Greetings, Serafina
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WerewolfLupis Featured By Owner May 15, 2014  New member Student General Artist
Very well written, it wasn't something you would find at a college but rather, something that was written by a person who has taken their time to strengthen their craft. 
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my god I was SO PLEASED to see this on the front page today. Congratulations :)
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RussianTim Featured By Owner May 15, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you :)
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner May 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner May 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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RussianTim Featured By Owner May 15, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you very much! :)
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