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There has always been a silver lining.
It's tarnished
But if you melt it down
and
Shape it into a bullet,
It will still kill a werewolf.

Not all dogs chase cars.
Weeds don't know they are killing the Petunias

Even monsters die
The only difference is that they don't get flowers and nobody wants what they leave behind.
Things could be a lot worse.
Eight black balloons
The last Raven feather
A gray hair floating in your tomato bisque.
Knowing that blood tastes like dimes.

I still believe that there is good left in our world.

Orange things make me laugh.

I knew a girl who thought that ghosts only
haunted mansions in
New England.
Haven't been writing much lately. Trying to break through the writer's block. Comments/critique welcome.
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Pyrefly-child Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I just love all the ideas in this, such a tight-little-interesting story.

P.S: I've stole a traffic cone, a speed limit sign and driven my car into both on separate occasions.
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Puppetlimbs Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
I don't pretend to understand it, but it was beautiful :)
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margeinabag Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I adore your work so much that it's like getting punched in the face. Keep up the good work, sir.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2011  Student Writer
it can't be THAT good lol. But that's very kind of you to say. I appreciate it. oh and thank you for the watch. I'll be sure to check out your gallery!
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XTRQS Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011
If this is you trying to break through writer's block I'd love to see what you can do when you're inspired. This is pretty fantastic, you see.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you very much!
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XTRQS Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2011
You are most welcome!
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SylvanSmith Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Really interesting and well written.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you!
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SailorAstera Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011
I don't know all that much about writing in general but this is the kind of thing I like. It's got a very stream of consciousness feeling but it doesn't stray too far from itself.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011  Student Writer
I'm glad you liked it. And thanks for the fave!
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SailorAstera Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011
No problem :3
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darkallegiance666 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011
Love this piece of writing. Despite your writer's block you seem to be still writing high quality pieces.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. I guess the term writers block isn't quite the same for me lol I usually expect myself to put out a good peice of writing everyday and if I don't I kind of feel weird. I'm sure I can't justify calling this a true writers block lol
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darkallegiance666 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011
One good piece per day???!!! Good God, man!!! You expect a great deal from yourself. Your writing is nothing like Sylvia Plath's but your determination & drive reminds me of what I've read of her in a biography. She wasn't satisfied unless she had 20 poems at a time sent out to magazines in the mail. Please try not to over-do it too much. :)
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011  Student Writer
Lol I'll try not to strain myself to hard. I just have big goals. Writers all I really want to do with my life and although unrealistic I hope I can become the next great American writer... World writer even. I'd like People to study my literature a hundred years from now and still find enjoyment reading it. Gotta start somewhere ( sorry for dumping my little mission statement on you) :)
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darkallegiance666 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011
I used to have the ambition to be a published writer (& I've read books daily for 45 years), so I understand & appreciate what you're doing. I've got a novel that I'm about to print off & send to an agent, but it's kind of semi-autobiographical so I haven't got high hopes for it - nasty, heavy subject matter, lol.

However, I do have another friend here on DA who is young & also wants to be a published writer & just write for the rest of her life. Like yourself, she is a very good writer, & I really hope that both you & she achieve your goals. I strongly believe that you are both excellent writers, yet realistic, & that you both deserve publication. I haven't found many good, modern writers - there is a dearth of them, & I have told my children that they have let me down in this field (as well as in doing art which they are talented at but don't bother much with) - don't worry - they take this in good part as it's not an insult, & one of them is making video games which is a creative endeavor. I have hopes that you two will succeed because you are both talented, practical & you both work hard. :)
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011  Student Writer
I can't say enough how much I appreciate your encouragement. You always have something helpful and relevant to say. I wish you luck with the novel you wrote and hope to see it on a book store shelf sometime soon! Make sure you let me know if it gets published and I'll pick up a copy. I'd like to read the work of this other writer you spoke of unless you don't want to show her off which I understand. I'm always eager to meet talented writers on here. Without sounding harsh (because there really are many great artists on DA) but sometimes its hard to sift them out through the "ordinary" work and I don't socialize with many people my age here in Indiana that enjoy poetry and short fiction.
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darkallegiance666 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011
I correspond by email (& in comments here) with the other writer who I have faith in & who keeps on writing despite heavy opposition from her parents, so I'll have to ask her if I can give you her name. Her parents just found out that she was corresponding with me & gave her hell for it even though I am exactly how I say I am on YT & on DA & am by no means at all an "adult predator". I'm a vegetarian, so I'm not even a predator when it comes to animals, & in my rotten physical state the whole charge is laughably ridiculous. I can understand it though, because who ever really knows who the other person is on the other end of the internet, unless you can get a real idea of who they are by their words & get enough evidence via videos etc to see that they are who they are. One 36 y/o man from the UK (not a romantic thing - I don't date & am definitely not looking for a relationship or to meet anybody face to face or even chat or skype), had a friend who believed that I was not real, as did his mother, which I found slightly strange. This man had contacted me on YT after watching some of my earlier videos where I (embarrassingly) talk on webcam - not recommended viewing, imo. I'd take them down out of embarrassment except that I thought that at least they showed that I was a 50 y/o woman, but this man's friend suspected that I had employed an Australian actress to play myself!!!

If I ever get published I'll send you a copy of the book, although I think that it's rather upsetting & raunchy reading (which makes me think that it will never get published).

I also know what it's like not to have people around who are interested in poetry & reading. I've suffered from a lack of friends in this area for most of my life, which is another reason why I like this DA site so much. I wish that the short story would make a proper resurgence again in published literature. Some books are turning out the size of bricks these days & the quality of writing is suffering, imo.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011  Student Writer
HAHAHA We live in strange times when it's more plausible that someone hired an actress to portray herself than to accept that she is a real person. Sorry but I find that both sad and funny. I don't want the girl to have any problems with her parents so I understand if we won't be able to correspond. She must be young if her parents are being that protective and I have to say I understand. It's easy enough to fake who you are and there are a lot of bad people out there. (although I assure you I am really a college kid from Indiana in case you had concerns lol)

I have a few friends that know I write stories and poetry but they seem almost uncomfortable with it. I think my personality in day to day life doesn't necessarily convey that of a poet or a "literary scholar". I'm shy around people I don't know and don't really talk to anyone unless they speak to me first and since I'm 6 4 and have a giant beard I guess I can be intimidating. lol. Around my friends I'm more of a joker and "lets go have some fun". But when I write I feel like a completely different person. Like it's a part of me I can release that I don't get to with anyone else. I'm glad I have DA or I may have given up on writing...not having anyone to talk to and critique work with. '

I plan on writing a collection of short stories as well as poetry. try to plunge into all the different areas of writing. I'd like to write a graphic novel if I can find a good artist to work with. I need to start reading more. You read a book a day!?!
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ninjababy Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I appreciate the simplicity and candidness of this with the complex images woven in. It feels like I'm reading private thoughts, and that's extremely satisfying to my inner voyeur. The only place that stuck me was putting "and" on a line by itself, but that's a matter of preference.

Love this.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student Writer
wow that's very kind of you. I'm glad you liked it. The "and" on it's own looked better in the original format of this poem but I don't know how to change anything when I put it on DA :/
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ninjababy Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, now that I understand. Getting formatting to stick from some other source to here is a wonderful exercise in futility.

Formatting or not, it's still an excellent piece. :)
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DesuNeko Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student General Artist
That's a terrfic title hooked me right away and describes the smattering of thoughts in this poem perfectly as well as matching with the poets persona. I love the breaks it in the text that make you pause and they way the thoughts are broken up yet somehow feel as if there connected.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. I'm glad that readers aren't being turned off by how scattered the thoughts are but rather finding a connection between them.
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DesuNeko Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student General Artist
There is more poetry in random day dreams then coherent thought, which is why I'm so fond of it.
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The-Virgin-Suicide Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student Writer
There's something about this that I'm entirely in love with.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student Writer
Glad you liked it :)
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Lightning-Powered Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Professional General Artist
Why are they always so random yet, somehow.... make a complete though.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student Writer
I have no idea but the important thing is that they keep making sense! lol
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Lightning-Powered Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Professional General Artist
thought*
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remainingoptimistic Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I like how the ideas are fragmented yet still have a continuity to them. Also the pieces themselves are great as well.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you :)
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remainingoptimistic Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
my pleasure :D
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SoraIsMyHomeboy Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is so deep and powerful. seemingly odd and nonsensical at first, but there's some strong truth behind it. amazing.
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TheKingofCretins Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011
I love how it seems like a collection of random thoughts, but there's a sort of underlying theme that seems to linger just on the edge.
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tryin2findmyplace Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
this is incredibly intriguing.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student Writer
thank you!
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The first stanza is very clever. I love that it starts with a cliche and that develops it into something original.

I'm also impressed by the line "knowing that blood tastes like dimes." Usually good poetry relies on the coincidences of language, but you've made good use of a coincidence of physics/biology.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2011  Student Writer
I'm glad a few of the lines stood out! thanks
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FireSwordRayn Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Student Writer
Without monsters our world be boring!
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KittySib Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
mew??? It's very interesting, and I encourage you to keep writing. The main confusing thing is-where is the traffic cone???
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