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I’m All That’s Left of Me

She put her lips on the fountain when we were kids.
I've kissed too many people to still be mad about it.

The first time she slept in my bed I had visions
of my grandfather decaying in his coffin.

(The scuttle of tiny legs and a far away buzzing)

I woke up to a thousand pairs of eyes staring at me.
Hers were closed, but her mouth started moving.

“People who dream about the dead often attract flies.
I’ll tell you my nightmares if you tell me yours.”

It was winter and the windows were closed.
There are flowers that bloom once in a life time.
The things I see during the day prepare me for the night.


A family moved into her old house.
They don’t leave beer cans on the front porch.
For some reason that makes me sick.
The only picture I didn't burn is of her
looking past the lens and straight into my eyes.

Everything else about that life is gone.
Sometimes   even me.




This is the worst day to tell me I’m blind
This is the first thing I've written in months. I'm just happy to be putting words back on paper. Let me know what you think kindly DA friends.
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Lamarridley2 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow the imagery in that verse is chilling but moving.  one of the best i have read in a while.
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Lunulae Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Student Writer
I know that feeling of being absolutely desiccated, as if the muse has left forever. I just got back to writing myself, and the words were painfully slow and strained in emerging. But this, this is a glorious comeback. I copied a few lines to appreciate in particular, but found myself reposting the entire piece. This burrowed so deep within me, I can still feel it ringing in my ears.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you so much.  Your words are encouraging and much needed.  I'm glad you could connect to this piece. :)
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lilfixit Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This makes me want to know more details. I want to know more about her and more about what she meant to you. It also makes me pretty sad.

I hope you continue to be able to write.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Leave them wanting more..thats what they say. lol   thank you for taking the time to read and comment.  I appreciate your feedback 
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Photopathica Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013   General Artist
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Awesome!  Thanks for the feature :)
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Student General Artist
Those last few lines are are beautiful; very concise and undiluted. Lovely work.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you :)
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Shoeborn Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Student General Artist
You're most welcome. :3
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EvranaWolfsong Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is lovely!
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks!
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EvranaWolfsong Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:heart:
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angelenroute Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Professional Writer
Hi, Sean here from :iconwe-poets: for a requested critique.

Title already on piece, doesn't need to be repeated within poem text.

(The scuttle of tiny legs and a far away buzzing)
...you can make faraway one word here

There are flowers that bloom once in a life time.
...lifetime is one word

Sometimes even me.
...delete extra space

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Overall, cool poem...I think it feels more like you wrote it in slow motion though, tiny vignettes instead of one constantly flowing piece. I noted that you haven't written anything in a while though, so it's good that you got this here at least! :) Best wishes, --Sean
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you for taking the time to look this over.  Sorry it took awhile to reply. Busy summer so far.  I'll take note of those grammatical errors and correct them.  I've always been awful at editing before I submit.  Thanks again!
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013   Writer
I really like this. Especially that last line.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you :)
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013   Writer
You're welcome. Hug 
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darkallegiance666 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013
It is well worth the wait!!
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successwithhonor Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2013  Student Writer
i really, really like this. i almost feel as if the last line is unneeded, the piece ends so well with "even me"

cheers :coffeecup:
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks for that.  I really like the last line but i think you might be right about it not fitting in this poem.  Perhaps it could be used somewhere else.   
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successwithhonor Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Student Writer
of course! and by no means am i discrediting the greatness of the phrase-- you totally should save it, cheers :coffeecup:
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It's really good!
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you :)
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oracle-of-nonsense Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Student Writer
Really enjoyed this, nice to see work from you again :)
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks ! :)
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
Hi, John. Good to see you here again. :)

Which pictures did you burn?
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joshuastump Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013
Nice John. Not entirely sold on that last line (maybe it's the extra spacing before..)

Glad to see you are writing again. Stop up by 42 Miles sometime next semester and say hello.
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks man,  Appreciate the feedback.  Hows your summer been?
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sounds like a bit of processing going on here.
Something I need to do often. :)
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ArachnoWolf Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent!
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you :)
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ArachnoWolf Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :  )
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ShadAlex1011 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Wow...that was good...
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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks!
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ShadAlex1011 Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Welcome
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student Writer
I got chills. You gave me chills. 


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RussianTim Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Professional Writer
haha thanks.  I appreciate it
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations on getting back into writing with something so good! :D
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Lightning-Powered Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Professional General Artist
This makes me want to write something. It was THAT GOOD.
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Sutathewolf Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow...
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