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I've spent too many years sitting
in the back of a classroom.

We see thousands of chalkboard faces
in the evening haze of rush hour traffic.
The nicest days of the year always happen
when our Teachers give us detention.
We can't be trusted to punish ourselves.
Grab a stick of chalk and begin.

100 times- I will not cheat on my husband.

100 times- I will not miss my nephew's soccer game so I can drink alone.

100 times- I will not leave smaller tips for the older, less attractive waitresses.

100 times- I will finally get the courage to kiss her tonight.

100 times- I will tell him it is over if he hits me again.

100 times- I will not be weak.

100 times- I will notice the sky today.

100 times- I will invite the widow in 5A to Christmas Dinner.

100 times- I will call my sister.

100 times- I will learn the difference between what is worth fighting for and what isn't.

100 times- I will ask my co worker how he is doing and actually care.

100 times- I will do more than just get by.

What if there were no erasers?
Another piece I have been working on. Not really sure what to say about it. Comments are welcome.
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Critique by TheDeathOfAlibi Apr 7, 2012, 10:34:30 PM
This piece spoke to me. It yelled at me. It hit my heart like a bullet. It has so much emotion, so much kindness, so much love. That even though it is really simple. . . It brings out everything in my heart. You hit the nail on the head with this. You are a fantastic writer. Love it.

The only thing I could say so you can take something away from this is just; never lose sight of what you have done here. How you connected to an audience through emotional and verbal production. This what poetry is.

Thank you so much for sharing,
Tristan Cody.
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Very original, and yes what if there where no erasers? You could not erase life's mistakes or promises you made. it has melodic rhythm and really gets you in the heart. those are great promises for anyone to make and actually follow through with them and not erase any single line of promise. mixing class room life with the real world makes a absolutely great mixture which is true teacher teach things to you that are important to you in life. i gave you five stars on every thing because this is the best piece of literature have ever read on deviant art out of my 2 years of experience!
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phillipskid32 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful, one of my favorites of yours.
Kearrice Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
A true piece that encourages you to actually live life.
Gangstapegasus Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2012
this really gets to people...good poetry tends to do that :3
RussianTim Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you!
Husky-21 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012
You just wrote down what everyone thinks, now and then, but never deared to ask. I adore your writing
RussianTim Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you so much :)
jagrier Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2012  Professional Writer
I have placed this poem in an Art Feature called "Poetry+Art: Early April Poetry." [link] I hope you enjoy the feature! If you want me to remove the poem or make a change, let me know.
RussianTim Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you very much for the feature!
jagrier Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Professional Writer
My pleasure - glad you enjoyed the feature!
aml2525speed Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2012
I really like the part with "We can't be trusted to punish ourselves." - it's of a great impact
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