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This was a lesson in just how quiet it can be
when you don't make enough noise.

Me, holding a toy gun to a stranger's head
"Remember when things stopped being ridiculous?"

You, eating dandelions in a midnight field
"About the same time things stopped making sense."

A boy in church camp carved a small crucifix
for his arts and crafts project. He won the blue
ribbon and a brand new Bible.  The next morning
I found it hanging over our cabin door.
A toad was nailed to the cross.
Still breathing.
Still breathing.

Sometimes we wake up early enough to hide the evil from our world.
Still breathing.
Wow! My second DD. This is great. Thank you to the readers and those who suggested this piece. I'm very grateful.

Va'eira is Hebrew for "and I appeared". The first part of this poem is based on a conversation that I had with a good friend of mine a few years ago. The second part is why I stopped going to vacation Bible camp when I was 13. But ultimately, this mean so much more as a whole to me. Hope you like. Critiques are welcome.
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Nothing comes close to exemplifying the poignancy and power of this writer's words than the opening and closing stanzas and the cruelty that is wedged between them. Va'eira by *RussianTim ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
fantom125 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014
Love the end. Still breathing!-)
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know I've featured this piece in my 2012 showcase of literature: [link] :D
PossumFan Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is really good. I like it. :)

+ fave
CrematedMan Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Student Writer
I personally think the last repetition is overkill, either that or you ought to explore the poem further (just my opinion).

Nonetheless, potent imagery, lending an ironic sense of humour to depravity.
RussianTim Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Professional Writer
I revised this and many of my other poems before I published them. I agree that the last line wasn't really needed and I took all but one of the "still breathing"s out in the final draft. Thank you for the comment!
dragonpixies Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Pretty beautiful, and the hebrew gets you bonus points with me!
RussianTim Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you very much :)
CYCLONEKITTY1818 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
like the poetry. check out mine and tell me what u like about it
Meeya-san Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012
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